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看板Eng-Class作者turnleaf (leaf)時間13年前 (2013/01/02 22:52)推噓0(0推 0噓 7→)

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這是一篇tpo writing的模擬試題主題是 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste time. Children should not be allowed to play them 我寫的如下 ======================================================================== With the development of computer, there appearse a great deal of computer games in the market. But is this good for children? Some people believe it is not, but it still have a little bright aspect. First, Playing computer games can spur the children's creativitive. Most of the games are all in a fantastic story and charactors. It let children to have a place to dream. This is the bright side to the computer ganes. The type of the games, however, should be choose by their parents. For example, the eighteen prohobit games may hurt the children's mind. Parents should pay attention on it. Second, some computer games need the players spend a lot of time on it. This may waste the childrens study time to play it. Also it let them easily addicted. As a result, children sit in front of the computer not go out or chat with their friend. children will have a little chance become the social outcast. Third, Most of the schoolboy with a weak eyesight. To find the reason ,playing computer games is one og the major factors. In ordor to enchance the children'd health and ensure the learning. Parents can make a rule of the time they ues the computer. As the children have a good manner, parents can let them play the computer games but should resist the period of time.If the children play a bad behavior, they punished by not to use the computer. In conclusion, computer games has two sides. When the parents take good advantege of it, it may be positive to their children. On the other hand, it may cast a negativea factor to threat their children's academic performance amd health. Therefore, there is no use to prohibit children to play the computer games, the more important is how the parents they comtrol and choose the game. =========================================================================== 可以請各位前輩幫我修改一下嗎? 感恩~~ -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 111.242.142.33 ※ 編輯: turnleaf 來自: 111.242.142.33 (01/02 22:53)

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