[創作] Pain

看板poetry作者 (飄泰泰)時間11年前 (2012/11/28 09:27), 編輯推噓3(3推 0噓 2→)
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A thousand-horsed ambition Galloping toward a vast sea; Passion sits like an ignorant frog In tepid water broiling up. Tears shed from outside in: A flood welled up with no relief. A four-legged heart in captivity, Immersing into the dimension of apathy. Squeals that rock the birds in trees Bring down a jaunty man in grief. Uncatchable breaths thereby annotate The death of a martyr drowning awake. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.112.116.40 ※ 編輯: mrshoward 來自: 140.112.116.40 (11/28 09:28)
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11/28 09:50, , 1F
last line
11/28 09:50, 1F
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11/28 09:59, , 2F
what do you think about the last line?
11/28 09:59, 2F
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11/28 14:48, , 3F
it's good!
11/28 14:48, 3F
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11/28 20:44, , 4F
I like the images, rich and very vivid.
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11/28 22:06, , 5F
Like! :)
11/28 22:06, 5F
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