Re: [創作] I'm always the second choice
※ 引述《PowLluimniz (波西米亞)》之銘言：
: Instead of a comment, I think what I have are two little suggestions.
: I am not sure if you'd want 'em, but you may want to consider before
: you sing the lines out.
Thanks for your two "little" suggestions,they mean a lot to me!
Thanks again~
: First, maybe the second Phoebe part can be fixed, as it does not really
: parallel with the first part and Sandy's and tracy's do.
Yeah...you're right.
But I couldn't think of something better.(for now)
: little peculiar a beggar would say something like hoping the Communism
: could have worked out. S/he must be an educated beggar.
The one who were "mumuring about communism should work it out" was
"I" in the song. So I geuess I made a mistake in grammar?
But, actually, I think your guess (a beggar who murmurs about communism)
is pretty interesting. And it's really not that weird if a beggar
has that kind of....."knowledge" in Taiwan. (in my experience)
: Second, it surprises me when "Holy cow" appears. I think maybe it could
: be put in some other ways. Are you writing the lyric for some rock songs?
Ah....I think I tend to think of some lines in rock songs
when I'm writng (whatever things, even homework)
: I believe this could be a good song.
It feels so good to hear you say so, though maybe you're just being polite.^^"
: no link for this in this article.
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