Re: [Work] GRE ISSUE & ARGUMENT
thank for your suggestion!
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: In this post, I will focus on ISSUE230.
: It seems that you understand a variety of vocabulary, but I think the
: main problem with this essay has more to do with sentence itself.
: First, the sentence is too long and too complex. As a result, the meaning
: is obscured. Maybe you can try to write shorter sentences, to make the
: meaning clear first.
In fact.....the reason why I write so many long sentences is that I
can't adduce any good and insightful example to prove my thought....
so, all I can do is blah blah and blah.....
and your comment reminds me of a person, who wrote a similar style of article,
and got a low grade in GRE writing....
: Second, some sentences can be divided into more sentences. you need to
: find where to use a stop instead of a comma.
Could you do some demonstrations in this article?
Because the type of articles I read is usually like economist magazine
and my cerebration seems very odd....that I can't easily like most people to
constitute robust structure of article......
Seeing this, I know the importance of writing abstract to achieve
this purpose. Nevertheless, it costs much time for me.
Well, I think I still need more practice....
Sneakily telling you....I didn't finish this article in 45 minutes which is
the time of limit in real situation....
: Finally, I understand that you might try to write acdemically, but
: you use too many abstract words and some wrong usage. That makes
: the text incomprehensible. maybe you can try to make some examples?
like the fisrt paragraph in this reply i answered.....
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