[心得] 日月當空2
第二集感覺還在交代舊事和舖梗
主角一口氣喝了三碗湯,還預告了第四碗
床戲點到為止,期望含勃嘻遊記模式的人可能要失望了
但龍鷹和太平的調情戲還是寫得滿有味道的
關於大唐的舊人舊事:
婠婠是因思念徐子陵而亡,死後三年小侯被殺(先前手誤為死前三年)
兇手為明空的師兄法明,這段引出了小侯的徒弟夢蝶夫人
未來龍鷹南遊大江時應該還有後續
目前的敍事節奏.....有點怪怪的
明明是頭兩集,寫得卻像老黃過去小說收尾時的趕場模式
太多人物點到為止,原本看似重要的互動卻成了觸發事件用的過場
第一集開頭寫得像一入神都必定是難以生離
到後來湯也喝了,萬人簇擁,還簡簡單單地和兩大高手風過庭,萬仞雨變成好友
過去黃易小說主角的以戰養戰氣氛不復見,反而有點大劍師式的YY劇情
希望到對上僧王和突厥時能重拾點緊張感
一如我前文所述,黃易似乎是想用龍鷹這個角色,在武周這個舞台讓向雨田再活一次
這集又提到了幾次向雨田和燕飛的交往,這件事在魔門似乎也不是秘密
倒是老黃對向雨田的漂白越來越過火
不但寧道奇對他推崇備至,還說他毫無劣跡
那他四個混蛋徒弟是怎麼教出來的?再這樣畫蛇添足下去很不妙啊
其它劇情就不多描述了,以免影響閱讀樂趣
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