Re: [請益] 英文自我介紹改善

看板Eng-Class作者softseaweed (Gladys von Wackenheim)時間10年前 (2015/07/17 01:29)推噓3(3推 0噓 8→)

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整篇幫你改好了，懶得一個一個打 ※ 引述《aihosea (我在彰化*吃肉圓)》之銘言： : 英文寫作沒有很好，請大家幫忙改一下，謝謝 : Hello, 不要用Hello，改其他東西還有信第一行不要用逗號結尾，請用冒號或句號若這是作文的話你不應該把這個hello隔出來，請直接放到第一句裏面 Greetings, : I would like to tell you a little bit about myself. My name is XXX. : I graduated from XXX University with Chemistry bachelor’s degree in : Chemistry. I would like to tell you a little bit about myself. My name is ______, and I graduated from ______ University with a bachelor's degree in Chemistry. : I had worked at Kitchen for 1 year and 6 months in Australia. Kitchen是機構名稱? 不是的話不要大寫 I had worked in Kitchen for one and a half years in Australia. 若kitchen不是專有名詞用這句 I had worked in a kitchen in Australia for one and a half years. : As a kitchen hand, I must have to learn everything as soon as possible. As a kitchen hand, I had to learn everything at the fastest pace possible. : I had to prepare the food for chef, to move the stuff. I had to prepare food for the chef, move items around, etc. : 我要準備食物，搬貨物。 : Besides, I was in charge of order the stuff or refund the wrong stuff. 你這裏用besides的意義不明，還有不要用or因為你兩個都有做還有直接用refund的意思是你要"收回東西並退錢給別人"，如果是你要退還訂錯的東西那你應該要用像是request refunds Also, I was in charge of ordering supplies and (requesting refunds for / refunding) 看你選哪個 mispurchased orders. : The reason why I choose the Working holiday in Australia is earning more : money, knowing the different culture. The reason why I chose the Working Holiday program in Australia is to earn more money and acquaint myself with different cultures. : 除此之外，我要負責訂貨退貨。我選擇澳洲打工度假的原因是，賺錢，體驗 : 不同的文化。 : I had worked at XXX as an assistant engineer for almost 2 years. I had worked at _______ as an assistant engineer for almost two years. : The job is about to clean the machine, measure the vibration of the machine : and communicate with the Miss of assemble-line what is the proper time to : maintenance. 你講machine大家會讀的霧煞煞，可以的話請說的仔細一點 The job was to clean the machines, measure their vibrations, and communicate to the lady in charge of the assembly line on when to perform maintenances. : 我在某公司當助理工程師兩年。工作內容是清潔機台，量測機台的震度， : 和小姐交涉，在適當的時機，作機台保養。 : My strength is that I’m a fast learner, cautious and multi-tasking. : I hope I can join your team. My strength is in that I'm a fast learner, cautious while at the same time able to multi-task. I really hope I can join your team. : Thanks for your listening. 除非你要講出來，不然不要用listen，用個萬用的 Thank you for your time. 就好，還有thanks有點太口語了，應該要避免 : 我的優點是學得很快，細心謹慎、可以多工處理。我覺得這篇就算你用中文寫同樣的內容也會稍嫌太簡單可以複雜一點或更有感情會好一點 --

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