Re: [文法] 真的很爛的文法需要指正謝謝

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上色字是試改有錯之處還請強者糾正:) ※ 引述《Freakbear (北兒)》之銘言： : 小弟現在在上某地方的英文寫作課 : 老師給了我們三個短句叫我們練習 sentence building : 因為我文法超爛，也沒有甚麼構句的概念 : 之前準備多益也只有練習聽跟讀（七百出頭），用說跟寫就會卡住了，很卡。 : 而且感覺文法超錯誤連篇 : 三個短句我花了一個半小時寫了又刪刪了又改，越加越長感覺變成小短文了 : 在這鼓起勇氣po給各位老師看，希望能給我意見教我如何改進，謝謝 : 1. The man is an employee. : 我：The young man who wears a stereotypical glasses and colorful tie, : called Ryan,is an employee who join this company recently,full of : enthusiasm,wants to do a great thing to earn approval and compliment from : his colleagues and boss. The young man who wears a pair of stereotypical glasses and a colorful tie is Ryan. He is a new employee of this company. He is enthusiastic, and wants to do something great to gain approval and compliments from his colleagues and boss. : 2.The managers are having a meeting. : 我：The managers comes from different departments,such as Human Resourses : Department,Adiministration Department,Marketing Department,etc,are having : a extremely important annual meeting in the conference room at 6 floor. The managers come from different departments such as Human Resourses Department,Adiministration Department,Marketing Department,etc. They are having an extremely important annual meeting in the conference room at 6 floor. : 3.Apple is a company. : 我：Apple is a full of fashion and creativity company,which manufactured : lots of fun,functional and efficient products.Such as Macbook,i Pod Touch, : i Phone,etc.Some people even tattoo the "Apple logo"on their body.Apple : always make waves impact the world when they release new products. Apple is a fashion and creative company. It manufactures a lot of interesting, functional, and efficient products. Such as Macbook, i Pod Touch, and i Phone. Some people even tattoo the "Apple logo"on their body. When Apple releases new products, it brings impacts to the world at the same time. : 我知道亂七八糟，從今以後我會好好學習文法的，謝謝各位老師的指教 >.<" -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 219.70.194.158

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