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煩請各位幫忙指正修改我的英文作文... 謝謝你們。 -- 題目 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. -- 作文 After graduating from school, the final work people have to do is to find a job. When the topic comes about "it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject", I guess most of people would disagree with that because to specialize in one specific subject is much easier to get a job. However, I agree with that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects for a few reasons. First of all, having broad knowledge of many academic subjects can be more competitive. For example, my first job is doing research. I used the knowledge I had learned from college and I thought it is enough. But, as a big dissert happened to Taiwan, our research institution changed the plan on research. Now, I have to learn the factors of how the dissert happens. These are so unfamiliar to me and also learning the new knowledge takes time. I have to work harder than people who already know that. Second, having broad knowledge of many academic subjects can make us consider things more complete. When we face a problem, if we have broad knowledge, we can think for many views and make a better decision. For instance, I joined a studying group, every time we discussed the homework which the professor gave to us, students from different department would have different ideas and answers. Therefore, I think if I have broad knowledge, I could understand the points others give to me and I could think more complete. The last reason is that only having broad knowledge can lead to specific subject. We study at our young age, and how can that be possible for us to know which one is more useful? Therefore, I think the only way for us to choose the suitable job is to study many subjects. Having broad knowledge of academic subjects can help us to choose the specific subject that we interest in. For the three reasons, to be more competitive, to think more complete, and to be easy to choose jobs. I agree with that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. -- 非常感謝各位!!! -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.112.4.183 ※ 編輯: joysmalling 來自: 140.112.4.183 (09/09 23:09)

09/09 23:49, , 1F
第一段第二句 後面改成 enables you to get a job easier
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09/09 23:50, , 2F
這樣我覺得比較好
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09/09 23:51, , 3F
第二段第一句建議改成 can make you be more competitive
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09/09 23:56, , 4F
可以問什麼是big dessert happened to Taiwan嗎
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09/09 23:59, , 5F
how the dessert happened who already knew that
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09/09 23:59, , 6F
第三段第一句 more completely
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09/10 00:00, , 7F
we can think from many points of view
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09/10 00:02, , 8F
I think if I had a broad scope of knowledge,
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09/10 00:03, , 9F
the concepts others gave me and,,,,,,,completely.
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09/10 00:05, , 10F
第四段最後一句 that we are interested in.
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09/10 00:09, , 11F
最後一段 completely, and to choose jobs easily,
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09/10 00:10, , 12F
大概就這樣 以上僅供參考
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09/10 00:13, , 13F
graduated 畢業了 /graduating 將畢業
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09/10 00:57, , 14F
http://ppt.cc/htcL 我用Google Docs 方便排版
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09/10 01:09, , 15F
隨意看了Second這一段,很多Comma splice的錯誤
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09/10 01:10, , 16F
就是你子句和子句之間僅用comma隔開,沒有連接詞或關代等
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09/10 03:18, , 17F
推d大用Google Docs,排版清楚多了!
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09/10 09:11, , 18F
非常謝謝你們!!!
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