[閒聊] 一秒讓人出戲的句子
今天上班沒啥事情偷看小說,
隨便挑了一部應該是穿越發家致富類型的文,
前幾章都還沒啥,雖然劇情沒有非常精彩,但也順順的讀下去了,
直到以下的這段描寫讓我瞬間出戲:
面前的男人只是握住他的腳,輕輕地放到自己的膝蓋上,並親手脫下鞋襪,一寸一寸
按壓著紅腫的部位。
“骨頭沒事兒,只是扭到了筋。”
江逸的大腦處在當機之中。
“即便骨頭暫時無礙,也要好好養著,儘量不要走動。”蘇雲起繼續道。
江逸乖乖地“嗯”了一聲,為了掩飾臉上的不自然,開始沒話找話,“他們呢?”
蘇雲起一邊給他套著襪子,一邊朝後門抬抬下巴,“都在後院。”
“我自己來吧!”江逸伸手,卻被蘇雲起擋住。
江逸繼續沒話找話,“他們怎麼都在後院?”
“看熊。”
“那……咱們待會兒也去?”
“嗯。”
兩人一坐一跪,一問一答,再也插不進第二個人。
作者阿!他們才第二次見面你知道嗎?
不就是一個對話,硬要補一句「再也插不進第二人」。
我知道主角出現了,但是感情是相處、培養出來的,
溫馨的氣氛不是用「一句話」來表達的,至少我感受不到阿阿阿阿!
看到這邊瞬間出戲,腦中只剩下吐槽,最終棄文。
大家應該也有很多像這樣瞬間出戲而棄文的情況吧XDD
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