Re: [寫作班] BBS , smartboyjerr
※ 引述《smartboyjerr ()》之銘言：
: Bulletin Board System (BBS) is a computer system base on the Internet.
: It provides users a lot of useful functions, such as publishing articles,
: exchange messages and online games.
連接三個的詞性要一致
e.g., "... publishing articles, exchanging messages and playing online games."
: At the early stage of Internet development when people still use modem
used modems
: connects to the Internet, BBS is very popular. The first BBS was started in
to connect was
: 1972 in Berkeley, California. Unfortunately, after the World Wide Web was
: invented, BBS has lost its crown.
had
注意時態喔
雖然從現在的觀點來看，"BBS has lost its crown"並沒有錯，
但是原句中的referece point是"World Wide Web was invented"的當時，
所以要用過去完成式
: However, there are many users still like to use BBS today and most of
^^^^^^^^^不需要there are
可以說"many users still like to use BBS..."
或"there are many users who still like...."
: them are students. Because information on BBS exchanges very fast and almost
is exchanged
(People exchange information; information doesn't exchange itself.)
: every university in Taiwan have there own BBS, it is still popular in campus.
their on
: One of the largest BBS and most famous one is PTT. Acorrding to PTT’s system
^the
: record, the average number of users who are online at the same time is more
: than fourty thousands.
sp:"forty"; thousand不用加s
: Today, lots of students like to spend their time surfing on BBS.
: They use BBS to as a way to communicate with others, making new friends or
of communicating
跟之前一樣，要用一樣的詞性
So, "... communicating... making... getting..."
: getting the newly information. BBS undoubtedly became an important role in our
: daily life.
為了延續這個段落的時態，用"has become"比較好
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