[請益] 不好意思請大家評我的英文作文已刪文

看板SENIORHIGH作者 (Allison)時間11年前 (2013/06/13 15:12), 編輯推噓16(16推 0噓 32→)
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手機排版，請多多包涵。 希望大家可以給我一些建議，謝謝你們。 題目是運動 Jogging is my favorite way of exercising. I usually go jogging at a playground of an elementary school near my home after I have studied all day long. All I need to do the sport are a pair of jogging shoes, a mp3 player, and, the most indispensable one, a sunny day. Jogging is the most ideal way of exercising to me, because it doesn't require anything but my legs. Moreover, I can go jogging at any time as long as I want. Everytime after jogging, I get refreshed and feel more energetic. I think jogging has made me feel better about myself and helped me be in good shape. I can't count a day complete unless I'be jogged for at least 30 minutes. 辛苦大家看到這邊，麻煩你們了，謝謝!!! -- Sent from my Android -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 36.225.129.111
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06/13 16:22, , 1F
雨八
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06/13 16:32, , 2F
很恐怖 不要問
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06/13 17:14, , 3F
你有聽過建如嗎？
06/13 17:14, 3F
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06/13 17:39, , 4F
謝謝你們看我的作文，我會再加油
06/13 17:39, 4F
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06/13 17:45, , 5F
太短
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06/13 18:19, , 6F
太短，單調的平舖直述，用字太簡單
06/13 18:19, 6F
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06/13 18:21, , 7F
我忘了滿分幾分了，這樣大概只有一半分數左右
06/13 18:21, 7F
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06/13 18:23, , 8F
可以寫活潑一點，例如描述慢跑後汗水淋漓的快感
06/13 18:23, 8F
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06/13 19:23, , 9F
不要有錯字 文法正確就很好了
06/13 19:23, 9F
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06/13 19:23, , 10F
我英作沒很好 中規中矩拿17／20
06/13 19:23, 10F
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06/13 19:38, , 11F
這個大概拿個中間的分數吧
06/13 19:38, 11F
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06/13 19:39, , 12F
不過好像太短了點 就算是easy words也可以多用吧?!
06/13 19:39, 12F
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06/13 19:52, , 13F
"an" mp3 player 才對
06/13 19:52, 13F
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06/13 21:35, , 14F
不要刻意用太難的文法根本不會有人這樣用...這篇大概不
06/13 21:35, 14F
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06/13 21:35, , 15F
到十分吧= =
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06/13 21:52, , 16F
大概7分上下
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06/13 22:01, , 17F
11到13吧，可以再寫長一點，文法單字都沒有大問題
06/13 22:01, 17F
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06/13 22:02, , 18F
我指考大概寫200字左右，但是文法錯的可能比你多
06/13 22:02, 18F
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06/13 22:03, , 19F
而且沒有你寫的通順，拿14.5，給你作參考
06/13 22:03, 19F
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06/13 22:04, , 20F
想拿高分就寫長一點
06/13 22:04, 20F
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06/13 22:18, , 21F
個人覺得大概8~10分左右,很多贅字和中式英文
06/13 22:18, 21F
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06/13 22:20, , 22F
我指考寫大概100~150字,幾乎都是國中或以上一點點的單字
06/13 22:20, 22F
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06/13 22:21, , 23F
結果94年那次拿14/20,滿出乎我意料的XD
06/13 22:21, 23F
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06/13 22:22, , 24F
建議原po多閱讀例句,多查字典,看看你作文中一些字用法
06/13 22:22, 24F
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06/13 22:22, , 25F
再回頭看看這篇,你會發現很多地方不合語法
06/13 22:22, 25F
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06/13 23:21, , 26F
程度不好者 把字數寫多一點真的有用
06/13 23:21, 26F
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06/14 00:04, , 27F
這篇很多用法和文法都很怪啊. 最多10分
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06/14 00:11, , 28F
10差不多
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06/14 01:02, , 29F
很台式的英文. 要幫你改嗎?
06/14 01:02, 29F
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06/14 01:40, , 30F
7~9分,建議你英選沒把握滿分還是拚英選或其他科吧,別浪
06/14 01:40, 30F
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06/14 01:41, , 31F
費時間,作文難練CP值又很低,剩不到一個月欸
06/14 01:41, 31F
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06/14 07:04, , 32F
謝謝你們幫我評作文，嗯...我也是覺得應該要把時間用
06/14 07:04, 32F
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06/14 07:04, , 33F
在其他科...但我還會在加油的...
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06/14 09:06, , 34F
這樣要破10大概要遇到佛心老師 不過也不無可能
06/14 09:06, 34F
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06/14 09:07, , 35F
說真的14跟10也才差兩題閱測 練選擇比較實際
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06/14 10:16, , 36F
感覺很零碎 讀起來很不順
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06/14 16:15, , 37F
我覺得差不多有12欸 大家都遇到過很嚴的閱卷老師嗎XD
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06/14 17:45, , 38F
我英文作文學測遇到很鬆的 指考遇到很嚴的
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06/14 17:46, , 39F
呃然後國文相反... 同時鬆的話我就不用指考了=___=
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06/14 19:06, , 40F
內容太少又想延長,最後變成一條直線.很空洞...
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06/14 19:07, , 41F
我覺得寫這樣有個10分就夠了，其他時間拼別的吧
06/14 19:07, 41F
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06/15 15:37, , 42F
不知道我認知是否有錯不過 All I need to do the sport
06/15 15:37, 42F
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06/15 15:37, , 43F
後面是接is吧？不是all I need to do is (to) 嗎？
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06/15 15:43, , 44F
樓上對 難怪我掃過去一直覺得怪怪的
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06/15 18:05, , 45F
贅字有點多，句法還要加強
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06/17 04:02, , 46F
把基本文法寫好，有邏輯然後內容豐富點
06/17 04:02, 46F
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06/17 04:03, , 47F
千萬別相信寫150字就能高分...我寫250字19分
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06/21 20:38, , 48F
同樓上 我寫兩百多字18分(攤)
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