[請益] 英文自傳求批

看板Eng-Class作者 (パグ)時間9年前 (2016/12/28 21:33), 編輯推噓11(11012)
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本人目前大二要準備大三出去飯店實習的履歷,想請大家看看我的自傳有沒有哪邊錯誤或是不恰當的地方>_< 謝謝!! My name is XXX, majoring in hotel management. There are 6 people in my family. My character is strongly influenced by the environment in which I grew up. My mother who approaches everyone with friendliness and a caring heart has taught me to do likewise, so I was brought up to be an optimistic and warm-hearted person. I always willing to learn new things, and always do my best to achieve my goals. While at university, I participated in animal caring club. Through this club, I got a lot of knowledge of taking care of dogs and also learned that every life is precious and we have to cherish it. Moreover, I work part-time as a waitress for now. This job provides me a good opportunity to learn about customer service, as it requires good customer relation skills, maintaining a pleasant demeanor and a passion for the work. I also gained a lot of valuable experiences in dealing with customer. I am a fast learner who always put 100% effort in my work, and also believing that I would suit this position. I look forward to growing with a company where I could continue to learn, take advantage of my knowledge, and contribute as much value as I could. It is my greatest wish to be a part of your company. Thank you for your time and consideration. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 36.238.43.171 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/Eng-Class/M.1482932007.A.605.html

12/28 22:41, , 1F
My mother, who...(要有逗點唷)
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12/28 22:42, , 2F
I'm always willing to...(be verb不要忘記)
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12/28 22:45, , 3F
我記得believe沒有-ing形式?這點請其他大大確認ˊˇˋ
12/28 22:45, 3F

12/28 22:46, , 4F
要寫飯店有關的特質 第二段就不用了
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12/29 00:04, , 5F
for believing的用法非常多喔,是可以的
12/29 00:04, 5F

12/29 01:15, , 6F
想請問k大為什麼呢?不懂QQ
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12/29 01:16, , 8F
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12/29 07:44, , 10F
樓上,動個手指辜狗一下“for believing”,算我拜託你
12/29 07:44, 10F

12/29 07:50, , 11F
不過坦白說,這篇內文我沒看。喔對,還有兩首名曲跟你分享
12/29 07:50, 11F

12/29 07:50, , 12F
,“thank you for loving me”, “I hate myself for lovi
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12/29 07:50, , 13F
ng you”
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12/29 08:18, , 14F
重點不是有無ing,而是沒有countinius的用法。不要急著酸人
12/29 08:18, 14F

12/29 08:18, , 15F
,先確定自己搞懂了。
12/29 08:18, 15F

12/29 08:34, , 16F
Nelly沒有酸人吧xd
12/29 08:34, 16F

12/29 08:37, , 17F
感覺不出在酸人+1 xd
12/29 08:37, 17F

12/29 08:48, , 18F
我看錯了,對不起…我以為他說“k大為什麼不懂呢” 對不
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12/29 08:48, , 19F
起,我錯了。(嗚…在別板吵到有點腦充血,nelly對不起。
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12/29 17:29, , 21F
家裡六個人也可以不用說吧 跟後文沒有關係
12/29 17:29, 21F

12/29 22:28, , 22F
最後一段寫得有點多,都不是重點
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12/30 01:14, , 23F
謝謝大家的指導:)
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