[15春] 在地下城(ry 05消失
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其實這個小說也是有難拿捏的地方
地下城目前只有356算是大戰鬥場面(牛頭人&Bug級BOSS)
剩下124都是屬於偏日常的過程
勢必只能收在3跟5 (6的話...只能說敢這麼作真的是沒有下限了)
如果說收在3的話 對於各個角色的描寫就可以更加深刻
戰鬥場景也能做得更加精緻 例如銀衛追逐戰 例如魔法使用過度的樣子
對於莉莉的內心描寫也可以更加細膩...而且還可以撈二期阿幹!!!!!!
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要說的話1 2的戰鬥場面也是可以做很棒的 像是主角斷刀那邊就作的超敷衍
原作是主角抓到空隙刺向對方 結果刀斷掉傻眼 然後才抱著必死的決心跟神大人分離
這邊就只是當靶子然後被斷刀 然後就哭哭說神大人請逃吧我去當誘餌
幹貝爾本來就是敏捷型你他媽拿去當坦 WTFFFFFFFFF
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牛頭人段落我甚至覺得可以做得跟蟻王VS會長一樣好!!
雙方不斷的攻防 貝爾不斷的與死亡擦身 進而抓住最後的勝機 戰勝過去的夢魘 幹超熱血的
除了對於貝爾自身有重大意義 更給了洛基眷族變強的慾望
這段如果他媽的亂做 我*!&HOD!@#*&%~(#435@RS
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其實不是很明白您的意思呢 我還是安靜好了
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抱歉人家玻璃心 碎滿地 乓啷
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兩位冷靜點吧 你看看上面那個看戲的(X
By the way 12的戰鬥場面只是相較於3比較弱 但是還是很棒的
只是大多著重於角色之間的互動以及內心的刻畫
※ 編輯: trollfrank (59.122.225.213), 05/03/2015 00:32:33
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