Re: [心情] 親愛的學生們

看板CS_TEACHER作者glamour1015 (mesmeric song)時間11年前 (2013/01/13 23:12)推噓4(4推 0噓 1→)

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※ 引述《maximus1523 (麥西幕士)》之銘言： : Dear son/daughter : There is nothing that I need to say that you don't already know : about the significance the test mean to you. However you must not be mistakened : when I say "significance" because significance bears various facets. : When I was at your age, I, too, was in the struggle you are in now; : all that mattered in my life was all about competition and the yearning : how getting admitted by prestigious universities may change my life and make : it better. 我實在沒必要幫你改，但你教英文的，英文怎麼可以寫成這樣我忍不住改了一段，讓你知道寫文章不要連單字mistaken也錯，不確定也不查字典特別是一位英語教學者你這是寫給你學生，這本是好的原意，但你是寫給"學生" 學生都看不懂，那你的本意不就只淪為賣弄又更何況你的英文錯的胡塗如果版主覺得這篇不妥請刪 (1)你第一句最後的that名詞子句在第一句裡無文法功能，say的受詞是nothing，而你那個that子句是你為了語意而硬塞 (2)don't already know是什麼意思?到底是已經知道還是不知道，already沒有否定 (3)the significance [ the test mean to you] 你用名詞子句當同位語，但顯然這個同位語並不是significance的補充說明，文法上有衝突，而且你主動不一致可改： how significant the exam means to you 或： the significance of the exam (4)must not 是禁止，請用don't be mistaken by significance 另外mistakened是錯字，只有mistaken pp當形容詞用 (5)when I was your age ，沒有at (6)I,TOO,WAS.. too不適合放句中，而且還馬上放代名詞I後面，這是外行寫法，太像中文。請用I also... (7)yearning是渴望，跟你要表達的struggle不合，可用blind pursuit of prestigious ... (8)沒有how getting 只有 how to get... (9)片語get (be) admitted to 不是by (10) may change...前應該是主詞，可是你的主詞卻是一堆其他不能當主詞的結構 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 1.169.101.75 ※ 編輯: glamour1015 來自: 1.169.101.75 (01/13 23:14)

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