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The glowing dusk envelops us in a dream
Of a long day's hard work
In which we toil and toil
To root the roots of all things optimistic.
We come home to a table of yesterday's
Leftovers, reheated from the night before.
In the microwave a religious play
Of reincarnation from jelly to fat.
Family driven to greet one another
Find comfort in little variations of the day.
Reported crimes of bitty alterations,
The eyewitness of epic resilience.
The steel dragons sidewind across the city
To bear pilgrims toward the shrines of things.
Dusk gives way to dawn, dawn to dusk.
Before we wake, life has been forever elsewhere.
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Revised after receiving suggestions.
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This is my first time completing a poem.
I can yet find a title for it, so temporarily it is "not titled".
I'd love to have others' opinions and learn from them.
You would be indeed very kind to let me know what you think of it.
Hope to contribute more in the future.
:)
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