[創作] In void b'tween barren land and …

看板poetry作者 (L'amor Celeste)時間13年前 (2010/10/05 21:01), 編輯推噓6(6020)
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In void b'tween the barren land and aloof sky, A dim spectre-like cavalier did stride--- A wild drifter of cold and lonely pride, Which bade him from his companions fly. I saw afar his pale frame stiff and dry, So I greeted: "remote traveler, what side Art thou from, in such a sorrowful ride?" His eyes pierced mine, yet granted me no reply. And his fingers caressed an antique lyre. 'Tis a wordless melody sweet but sad, Soaring from the abyss of human mire; Enlightened was my heart with dullness clad To know the grief without a heartfelt ear: Albeit the strings were outworn, who would hear?* *From 岳飛 小重山詞(知音少,絃斷有誰聽?) -- Where words fail, music speaks. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.119.203.47 ※ 編輯: amadeus1223 來自: 140.119.203.47 (10/05 21:03)

10/05 21:11, , 1F
love the imagery!但出格也太多吧XD
10/05 21:11, 1F

10/05 21:18, , 2F
不好意思~出格是指格律嗎?
10/05 21:18, 2F

10/05 21:55, , 3F
like this one :D
10/05 21:55, 3F

10/05 21:56, , 4F
amadeus is absolutely talented in
10/05 21:56, 4F

10/05 21:57, , 5F
writing poems and rhyming! :D
10/05 21:57, 5F

10/05 22:01, , 6F
I am flattered:)
10/05 22:01, 6F

10/05 22:02, , 7F
but I'm not talented at all!
10/05 22:02, 7F

10/05 22:02, , 8F
writing poems is a hard work for me
10/05 22:02, 8F

10/06 07:56, , 9F
lovely
10/06 07:56, 9F

10/07 19:22, , 10F
yes
10/07 19:22, 10F

10/07 21:45, , 11F
抑楊格真的太難了...
10/07 21:45, 11F

10/07 21:45, , 12F
我只能做到每句十音步這樣~
10/07 21:45, 12F

10/07 23:59, , 13F
抑揚格是什麼? ^^" 想請教 amadeus :P
10/07 23:59, 13F

10/08 00:14, , 14F
喔喔就是寫sonnet的話每句的都要
10/08 00:14, 14F

10/08 00:15, , 15F
iambic pentameter,一個非重音接一個
10/08 00:15, 15F

10/08 00:16, , 16F
重音,總共五組十個音節這樣!
10/08 00:16, 16F

10/08 00:16, , 17F
(有錯請高手指正~)可是真的很難
10/08 00:16, 17F

10/08 00:17, , 18F
所以我都是馬馬虎虎每句十音節就算了~
10/08 00:17, 18F

10/08 00:18, , 19F
抑揚就不去管他了
10/08 00:18, 19F

10/08 01:16, , 20F
呃。我都全部不管,也不知道 XD
10/08 01:16, 20F

10/08 07:09, , 21F
也不知道 +1 XDD
10/08 07:09, 21F

10/08 10:29, , 22F
haha...握手 XD 我也不懂格律
10/08 10:29, 22F
※ 編輯: amadeus1223 來自: 140.119.203.47 (10/08 19:48)

10/08 19:50, , 23F
我覺得不被形式拘束也很棒啊!
10/08 19:50, 23F

10/08 19:50, , 24F
我用十四行詩的form有時候只是想讓自
10/08 19:50, 24F

10/08 19:50, , 25F
己寫的東西比較像"詩"~
10/08 19:50, 25F

10/08 22:10, , 26F
這年頭寫商籟體的人真的不多見!
10/08 22:10, 26F
※ 編輯: amadeus1223 來自: 140.119.203.47 (10/16 22:49)
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