[創作] Rest assured, never shall I ask from …

看板poetry作者 (L'amor Celeste)時間13年前 (2010/09/07 21:44), 編輯推噓0(0010)
留言10則, 2人參與, 最新討論串1/1
Rest assured, never shall I ask from thee, Never, my beloved, the void merit Of eternal fidelity, and see: I myself adhere not to such credit. Defer thy scold, prithee, and cast an eye On Human Heart, that is bound in the gyre Of self-deceit---endless layers of lie, So waste not upon it thy lovely ire. Detesting what once loftily above; Adulating what once trodden below, We defect from love to hate, hate to love, And feign to praise the keeping of a vow. Thus, do follow thy everchanging will, For none in vicissitude shall stand still. -- Amor vincit omnia. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.119.203.47

09/07 23:11, , 1F
the twist in the last couplet
09/07 23:11, 1F

09/07 23:11, , 2F
could be a bit more dramatic, but
09/07 23:11, 2F

09/07 23:11, , 3F
otherwise an outstanding poem!
09/07 23:11, 3F

09/07 23:12, , 4F
(我是不是太挑了?XD)
09/07 23:12, 4F

09/07 23:21, , 5F
thanks for the comment! I find it
09/07 23:21, 5F

09/07 23:22, , 6F
difficult to dramatize the twist,
09/07 23:22, 6F

09/07 23:23, , 7F
because I kind of finish all I want
09/07 23:23, 7F

09/07 23:25, , 8F
to say in the quatrains...
09/07 23:25, 8F

09/08 01:05, , 9F
試試上半敘述反面,下半轉正面?
09/08 01:05, 9F

09/08 01:06, , 10F
eg. not..., not; [statement]
09/08 01:06, 10F
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