[問題] 請高手幫忙看看這篇作文
這是我自己寫的98年台大外文英作
請大家幫我看看有沒有什麼問題
給個意見
題目是回答
Is going back to school in recession a good idea? 這個問題
標題自訂
規定要寫250~300字，我超過了
還規定要超過四段，不過我只寫四段
自己訂的標題(爛透了我覺得，標題超難訂)：
Continue studying or Go to work
Is studying always the right thing? Most people may say yes. However, when
more and more people want to go back to school just because they couldn’t
find a job, their avoidance through studying becomes a problem.
People who avoid to enter the society by extending their student life are
equivalent of lacking enough preparation to plunge themselves into the labor
market. Why do I say that? Being a student is largely different from being a
labor. When you are a student, all you have to do is go to the class, and
hand in your homework on time. Nevertheless, being a labor has to be with
many aspects of ability like being communicative, positive…and so on.
A vivid example is my cousin. My cousin was used be to a shy boy. In his
student life, every time when his professor called him to answer the
question, he shrunk back and not even said a word. People around him were
worried about his future career. However, he made up his mind to change
himself in the last year before he graduated. He started to force him to talk
to ten people every day, and now he becomes the most successful salesman in
his company.
Studying isn’t wrong itself, it can increase competitiveness and enrich our
knowledge. Only we don’t regard studying as a reason delaying entering the
society but just enjoy studying itself. Meanwhile, strengthen all kinds of
abilities, and we will have a more smoothly work life.
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