[履歷] 新鮮人履歷求批(英文)

看板Salary作者 (Dragon)時間9年前 (2015/06/18 12:01), 9年前編輯推噓10(10022)
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個人學經歷背景:淡江資管畢 116 MBA 欲應徵之職務:這份CL是我投實習時寫的 未來想走行銷相關工作 其實目前還沒畢業 所以根本連新鮮人都還不算 只是想先為未來作準備 看自己還不足哪裡 所以麻煩大家大力的批吧QQ~~謝謝 自傳履歷內容: Dear Hiring Manager, My name is XXX, Ryder is my nickname, and I am currently studying for a MBA degree at National Cheng Kung University. Yahoo, the giant of the internet, is the greatest company in the internet services industry. Yahoo was established in 1995. The first website I visited was YAHOO.COM.TW. At that time, I thought Yahoo liked a magic world. I could find anything I want on Yahoo. Nowadays, Yahoo is not only a search website but also a life assistant. Above all, I really love Yahoo so much and I am passionate about internet and mobile marketing. That is why I am interested in pursuing a Mobile Marketing Internship position at your firm, and have enclosed my resume and background information below. I am currently interning as a marketing assistant at ASUS Corporation. I have been working closely with the senior marketing executive on several new product promotion, planning the press conference, researching the market trends and dealing with consumers’ feedbacks. In addition, I had chance to learn what internet marketing is and how to promote the products through the internet. The things impressed me the most is that I made a slogan for a product and it was used on every posters and catalogs. Through this experience, I have developed analytical skill and honed my knowledge of marketing and communication skill. I am an enthusiastic, pleasant and open-minded person. Therefore, my friends usually described me as a good team player. I believe that teamwork is always better than individual. And the reason I got good GPA is I am a quick learner, especially the thing about computer and internet. Given my experience in marketing and personality, I think I am a strong candidate. I look forward to joining and contributing to your firm. A copy of my resume is enclosed for your reference. I would appreciate an opportunity to discuss my qualifications at your earliest convenience. I can be reached at 0912-xxxooo or via email at oxoxox@hotmail.com. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, XXX Enclosure: Curriculum Vitae -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 140.116.95.93 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/Salary/M.1434600074.A.A05.html

06/18 13:19, , 1F
華碩實習學到什麼可以寫寫
06/18 13:19, 1F

06/18 13:21, , 2F
個人特質移到第一段比較好,興趣要寫
06/18 13:21, 2F

06/18 13:22, , 3F
可以用個簡歷形式
06/18 13:22, 3F

06/18 13:26, , 4F
我覺得還不錯啊,原po多益至少900吧
06/18 13:26, 4F
謝謝大大 我也希望我有900 QQ

06/18 13:50, , 5F
可以不用介紹yahoo,第一段寫你為什麼要申請這職位
06/18 13:50, 5F

06/18 13:52, , 6F
一開始要寫上公司名稱和你要的職位
06/18 13:52, 6F

06/18 14:13, , 7F
歌頌yahoo幹嘛,全刪阿
06/18 14:13, 7F
我會提到Yahoo的歷史是想說明為什麼想爭取這個職位和加入這家公司 不過似乎寫偏了@@

06/18 14:21, , 8F
1.一個句子只能有一個動詞 2.yahoo的背景跟你的自傳一
06/18 14:21, 8F

06/18 14:21, , 9F
點關係都沒有
06/18 14:21, 9F

06/18 14:22, , 10F
"I thought Yahoo liked a magic world."這句文法有錯
06/18 14:22, 10F
I thought (that) Yahoo liked a magic world. 請問這樣的子句用法錯了嗎@@? 請大大糾正我一下 謝謝> <

06/18 14:23, , 11F
你可以把yahoo的歷史跟你admire Yahoo的原因寫成cover
06/18 14:23, 11F

06/18 14:23, , 12F
letter的形式 適當的運用小標分段
06/18 14:23, 12F

06/18 14:25, , 13F
同個句子的時態要一致 不能一下過去式 一下現在式
06/18 14:25, 13F
謝謝大大的文法校正!

06/18 14:49, , 14F
全篇幾乎都沒舉例---致命傷! 盡量別把自傳真的當自
06/18 14:49, 14F

06/18 14:49, , 15F
傳或作文,更何況你念過MBA, 東西應該更專業才是。
06/18 14:49, 15F

06/18 14:49, , 16F
好的自傳,應該直接點出自己的強項跟人格特質,符合
06/18 14:49, 16F

06/18 14:49, , 17F
你所想應徵的職缺,並舉例!
06/18 14:49, 17F

06/18 15:41, , 18F
光是第一段 就可能被刪了 英文履歷請簡單扼要
06/18 15:41, 18F

06/18 15:42, , 19F
提一下 你的專長 或曾實習的經歷 拜託舉個例子
06/18 15:42, 19F

06/18 15:42, , 20F
能給具體的數字更好 像是我擔任社長 社員成長兩倍之類
06/18 15:42, 20F
其實我的CL會沒舉例 是因為我的CV有提到 附上CV連結:https://goo.gl/l9AiP5 不知道配合CV後 這份CL會不會好一點點 @@? 再麻煩大家指教指教 :) ※ 編輯: dragon0518 (59.127.157.37), 06/18/2015 15:59:49

06/18 16:47, , 21F
Quick learner? Good condidate? Why should I trust y
06/18 16:47, 21F

06/18 16:47, , 22F
ou?
06/18 16:47, 22F
ok ... 我會再想想怎麼舉例 感謝大大!

06/18 17:15, , 23F
你是想表達yahoo像一個magical world嗎?@@ 印象中like
06/18 17:15, 23F

06/18 17:15, , 24F
解釋為“如同”時,是當介係詞使用
06/18 17:15, 24F

06/18 17:16, , 25F
你的那句是作為動詞使用,譯成yahoo喜歡魔法世界XD
06/18 17:16, 25F
好XDD~~

06/18 18:35, , 26F
看到長串yahoo介紹就end了...可以開門見山描述swot嗎?
06/18 18:35, 26F
swot會不會太老梗呀? (純粹疑問@@)

06/18 19:40, , 27F
求cv的字體XD,覺得順眼好看
06/18 19:40, 27F
哈哈 就是Word內建的Times New Roman字體而已呀XD ※ 編輯: dragon0518 (59.127.157.37), 06/18/2015 20:45:58

06/18 22:49, , 28F
這CV表格很眼熟 same as me
06/18 22:49, 28F

06/18 22:50, , 29F
該不會都是同一個網站來的~XD
06/18 22:50, 29F

06/18 22:54, , 30F
你CV裡時間present有網站說要用the present
06/18 22:54, 30F

06/19 01:59, , 31F
可以去Lang-8網站登入,有外國網友會幫你改
06/19 01:59, 31F

06/21 17:10, , 32F
第二段工作經驗可多秀一些,這段是牛肉!
06/21 17:10, 32F
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