[問題] 模考英作文分數不高.想問怎改進(有附作文

看板SENIORHIGH作者Willistar (Willis)時間11年前 (2014/06/30 23:38)推噓14(14推 0噓 37→)

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小弟模考英文作文映像中沒超過14 所以想請問各位大大哪邊有需要改進呢? 希望大家不吝於指教 :) 提示:選一個運動 1.運動如何進行 2.選擇這運動的原因和影響 Feeling the touch of the water,and enjoying the cool in the summer are fantastic. For me,a best sport is nothing more than swimming in a hot day. Swimming is a lonely sport, because there is few interaction with people when swimming.However,such a reason doesnt make the lovers ofIswimming decline.There are many people in swimming pool or beaches,and Im one of them.When Im swimming,I would pull the water backward in the water for moving forward,and freestyle is my favorite and the fastest moving in all gestures.The freestyle is that I pull my left hands in the water for turning my left cheek and breathing.The repeat of the action I said above is the simple introduction of swimming.Yet,not only does the reason that I can cool down myself in the summer provoke my willing for swimming,but the growth I get when swimming gives me the main motive to do it . I Because I always swim on my own,I can be more concentrated on swimming.Yet,when swimming,I felt at ease at the begining,but later I felt rather tired.The sour in my limbs made me want to quit,but I told myself that once I gave up, the effort I did before went in vain.Consequently,I encouraged myself to move and spent more effort to finish it.Now,eager to participate in swimming team in college,I felt energitic and worked more hard.Now,with every stroke of waterI pulled it more,and every pain in my body I ignored, I thought myself grow.Besides, many girls love swimmers for they are fit.So,I felt great and adored when strolled in the beach.For me,swimming is a teacher and an entainment in my life and thats the reason why I love it so much. 排版有點亂後天要指考加油還有希望大家能給我一些意見謝謝 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 114.37.210.224 ※ 文章網址: http://www.ptt.cc/bbs/SENIORHIGH/M.1404142723.A.15B.html ※ 編輯: Willistar (114.37.210.224), 06/30/2014 23:41:17

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