想請問一下
版大大家好呀!
我是個剛考完指考的高三小孩
嗯...可能版上有很多是學姊呢!
就是啊 我在高三的時候有寫了兩首英文的...應該不算詩的東西
很怕自己文法會不對阿 或是辭語用法不對
想借各位幾分鐘的時間
希望各位不吝賜教
１．life is a journey
life is a journey, for the body and mind.
what is the destination, and where to fly?
life is a trasury, a newly-developed mine
consists of ups and downs, laughter and cries.
to face the intangible life, you shall not hide.
be true, be sensitive, be open-minded and kind.
nothing lasts forever, but things live in mind
seek inside; unlimited beauty you will find.
2.
a flash of lightning, you i see.
in s twinkling i just can't believe.
after all stumbles and endless waiting,
how splendid a scenery stands before me.
with gaze too tender, smiles so sweet,
hearts fly free in both frantic and meek.
getting lost in the ocean named fascination.
how indescribable palpitate i did feel.
yet, it would not be the eternity.
for a heartbreaking burden soul can hardly lift.
though the sky darken and howling the wind,
stunning rainbow would conncet the spirit
and glorious sunshine console the grief.
true love perpetuates, in heart it lives.
以上兩首就是我寫的很像詩的東西
請各位版大幫我看看有沒有時態啊等等文法的錯誤
若有指教請回至信箱
謝謝！
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