[請益] 新鮮人英文自傳請益

看板Eng-Class作者時間8年前 (2016/06/18 16:24), 編輯推噓0(004)
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第一次打英文自傳 想請版上高手幫忙看看有沒有什麼問題 謝謝! My name is OOO. I received my bachelor degree in Mathematics from OOO University. In college period, not only did I understand a mass of knowledge about math, but I also learned numerous computer languages: C, Matlab, R, and so forth. I once took a course about Seminar on Practice of Industry of Insurance. In this course, I visited a life insurance company. Familiar with actuary and their daily jobs, cooperation with other departments, I became impressed and interested in actuary. Therefore, I am eager for becoming an actuary. Now, I have already passed exam P.   In my spare time in college, I had been a baseball team leader for one year. It was a valuable experience and improved my ability of leadership because I have learned how to ameliorate the performance of everyone and how to inspire them to strive for the game by teamwork. In addition, I also participated in OOO Club, a public-service club for Autism. Accompanying those children is definitely not a simple task. However, when they grow stronger, I think I have finished a meaningful work. In order to become an actuary, I will keep studying for SOA exams and make every effort to employ my professional knowledge to help accomplishing projects and solving questions to benefit company, though I do not have too much experience. Hoping that I can become mature efficiently, never be afraid of arduous challenge, improving myself from frustration. After serving mandatory military service, I can not wait to dedicate myself to insurance industry. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 140.112.25.105 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/Eng-Class/M.1466238285.A.5CA.html

06/18 19:45, , 1F
2處。都在第3段。1. help 後習慣原形動詞。2. Hoping
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06/18 19:45, , 2F
~ 用分詞片語,在閱讀習慣上會去找主要句...結果忽
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06/18 19:46, , 3F
然被句點斷掉了。。。
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06/18 20:04, , 4F
沒注意到 謝謝!
06/18 20:04, 4F
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