[請益] 想請版上前輩們批改文章
各位好，最近想練習寫作，但不知道自己程度在哪
還想麻煩各位前輩鞭一下，讓自己知道自己哪寫得不好
最近看經濟學人，將文章的內容自己做一個總結並寫篇文章
(當然總結可能不太對或偏離主題，但目的是看看自己的文章流暢度、正確性)
經濟學人文章主題是 Of banks and bureaucrats(不能貼網址內容，說有廣告嫌疑)
我自己寫的文章如下，再請各位給我點建議了 謝謝
(如果這樣去考雅思 或托福大概多少呢?我知道字數太少...)
The recenly news suggest that India's banking system confront a unwelthy
economic issue: Bank hava been damaged by its lenders. Because India has
soared their loan to mini credit and politician using their politic power to
get loan to supply money to their cronies. Besides, the bankers have wildly
optimistc about the economic make situation worse.
Banks have positive correlation with economy. When economic enviorment is
in boomed and active. The corporates always need a lot of money to investment
their factory or R&D in order to keep their competitivenesss. By borrowing
money from banks is always a traditional way to get funds. But it is
countrary to India. According to statistic bureau released data recently
shows that despite India's economic growth in GDP of 7.9%, one of the top
economic growths in the world. However, India's lender have lost over 200
billion rupees in recent quarter.
Soaring mini credit to those SME is popular to India in previous years.
It makes some companys which can not afford interest and amount to get bank
credit limited. And other corporates who have huge influence in India using
their powerful to dominate banks. These abusing loan makes bank cannot get
their money back.
To solve these problem. RBI prefer to consolidated 27 banks into less
than half numbers. Morever, Privating those state-owned banks is a method to
deal with these problem. But the most important things for India is to remove
their old idas that Banks should be owned by government.
謝謝各位的協助 感恩
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